Hi gang!

This is a little something I think about putting on a t-shirt for millenials


Looking for opinions before I smooth the lines in Illustrator. Sorry for their messy quality - I am not that experienced in hand inking. But that's a good thing, because often the design improves from it.
Happy commenting!
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also I first read 'opinion' as 'spinach' but that's probably just me
Overall i think it looks very nice and love how the bird is saying wut
Bhikkhu Pesala perhaps I should have added that the version for textile would be a single color.
I have printed on a silk screen carousel and am aware of difficulties with overlaying multiple colors. But have not worked with a textile printer, maybe there are other considerations there.
Andreas Stötzner noted
What kind of textile printer? I've worked with a few varieties in my day, but nothing recently. There was one that was exactly like screenprinting, but without the screens. Ink worked the same. Another was a kind of ink jet. Basically like CMYK and there were options for a flash, so you could print on dark materials. That was cool, but slow. Not for real mass production. I'm sure it's all improved by now.
I think you should start with a square and divide that into manageable parts first. Looking at "your opinion" (or "your spinach", which I now cannot un-see, thank-you Nathan!), I get the impression that you started off with a wide-spaced "your" but ended up having to cramp "opinion" into a reasonable space.
The "on" ligature at the end does not work very well, it's not a place where one would expect one. If you want one, try the "io" pair instead, so the word still has a natural last character.
On both:
The first large "L" needs a heavier foot, because now it looks like a swash "J". A pointy end at the left bottom instead of that loop might also work. Straighten the left "L" a bit; the contrast with the right "L" is too large, which also makes it difficult to interpret as twice the same character. They don't have to be identical, but I feel there are too many differences.
I like the intricate work inside the characters! The full color image shows it as some celtic-inspired bronze – nicely done, and those colors really work well.
The «joint» of the large L has some rather bumpy curves. The jester (?) in there could use some internal contrast.
The «EPIC» still strikes me as a foreign body. Maybe try lowercase blackletter? Or have some of that orange darkening on the «EPIC» as well. Its monochromaticity is contributing to the impression of being an add-on.
The whole suite can be seen here:
https://www.behance.net/gallery/80169233/A-Day-of-Ornaments
https://www.behance.net/gallery/89632447/Callivember-2019