I’m relatively new to type design, and this is my first try of making something experimental (and silly) like this. Although this is a rough sketch, I feel like I already need a good piece of advice.
The whole thing doesn’t feel balanced to me, probably because some letters have thin strokes and others don’t; some letters are just thinner than others (a, s, z). Any advices, please?
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If I were to change one thing, I'd change /z. It interrupts the flowing rhythm of the rest. It's too boxy and rigid, with too many right or close to right angles.
The way you've trimmed the outer cusps of /v and /w so close to the tip of the inner ones does reference other thin elements, so I get why you've done that, but I would reconsider it. It makes the strokes look almost detached from each other, and also dictates too wide /w, in my opinion.
I'm not sure about the inward facing curved elements in /t (bothers me more) and /y (less), they seem a little out of place.
The bent part of /j is probably too dark.
The top half of /f looks too crowded, try making the cross stroke thinner. Perhaps that of /t too could be thinner.
Try thinning a little the left stroke of /y as it approaches the right one. The joint looks too dark.
Keep up!
Off-topic: It'd be nice if you throwed in your last name at the end of your username (I've heard this is the policy here).
I agree that /z doesn't work as it is now. Maybe let the diagonal dictate what the letter should look like, and have diagonal ink traps to set it off from the horizontals...?
The /t's crossbar is too wide on the left side, but I would be tempted to widen the right side to match the typeface's generous stride. I'd drop the rounding in the joint.
The /w/v/y do need some rethinking. I like the idea of going organic and use round script shapes for them; it would certainly allow /y to have another of the nice ink traps. I don't mind the /k, currently, but maybe you could cut an inktrap between the two diagonals from the outside...? Or try a loopy script design there, too.