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Ofir ShavitOfir Shavit Posts: 303
edited June 18 in Type Design Critiques

Early stage artdecorativish face. The whole thing started from the idea for the M' and from it to the N' and W' and the rest.
Have a lot of styling issues, but I'd like to get some feedback on it at this point, plus...
Does the M' W' work at all? 
Am I stepping on someone's foot here?

Thanks

Comments

  • In general like it. There are a few apparent (visual) inconsistencies in stroke weights. Dunno if they are real differences without pulling apart the PDF. the crossing of the /X seems off, the lowercase /x seems fine.

    As for the M/W, if this were mine I might play with terminating the cross overs before they hit the stems.

    Kinda reminds me of a Coquette eccentric relative.
  • Ofir ShavitOfir Shavit Posts: 303
    edited June 18
    Thanks Mike!

    I think I have fixed the X' strokes, made some other improvements and added cross bars to the O' G' D', I'm trying to maintain the closed-shapes aspect as with the W' M' for now.

    The lowercase are still less developed.

  • Simon CozensSimon Cozens Posts: 196
    Would it work to thin the top crossovers of the /w as you have with the corresponding ones on the /m? I think that would make it more legible.

    That said, I have to work pretty hard to see the /m as an /m. Maybe a deeper cut on the vertex?
  • Chris DrabschChris Drabsch Posts: 67
    edited June 19
    Wow this is an interesting design. As much as I love the /M, I do read it as a /N at a small size. But I really like the experimentation. I wonder if widening the glyph might help distinguish it? 

    A lot depends on the eventual purpose of the design too. Eg, if it's targeting larger display use only, then legibility at a smaller scale isn't the biggest thing to get hung up on. But you can never really tell where it will end up so you have to be mindful of all use cases too.

    You may want to think about a system for the curved serifs, at the moment they seem a bit randomised. Check out Museo which is the gold standard for this style of design. Observe which characters use serifs, and which don't, and how many etc. Don't clone it, but learn from it ;)

    A last general comment about the lowercase letters - while the proportions of uppercase look good to me, I think the lowercase proportions might need reviewing. for instance, /u and /n are very different in width, and /p/q/b/d need more breathing room in their counters. But for an early draft it's fairly good.

  • Chris DrabschChris Drabsch Posts: 67
    edited June 19
    About /M too, maybe you can flip the /W design and use that as a base? It might be the square shape of it that's making me see an /N. Might also help resolve @Simon Cozens' earlier comment too.
  • Ofir ShavitOfir Shavit Posts: 303
    Thanks for the great advises Simon and Chris!

    Flipping the W' to an M' doesn't work...


    Widening it does, I think, as well as improving the serif system. 
    My focus is still on the Uppercase guys

    PDF attached.


  • Humburger: an atheist's lunch. ;)

    Actually, I find the new /M more legible than before. The /M/M is particularly nice!

    I'm not so fond of the many stylistic inconsistencies e.g. within and between /A/H/I/N/T, though. 
  • Ofir ShavitOfir Shavit Posts: 303
    Humburger: an atheist's lunch. ;)
    When veganism becomes a religion that's true.

    Guess I'll have to kill that I'...
  • Christian ThalmannChristian Thalmann Posts: 838
    edited June 21
    Humburger: an atheist's lunch. ;)
    When veganism becomes a religion that's true.
    I was referring to the stereotypical expression «bah, humbug»;)  (Though apparently it's less atheist and more anti-Christmas in meaning than I thought.)

    Yeah, the /I looks like it belongs to a Tuscan typeface. The asymmetry in /A and /H also strikes me as a bit contrived (I like it in /E). The /L could use a spur on the bottom left, and the thinning in /N doesn't match the handling of such intersections in other letters.
  • I think the advantage with the new /M is that it has a more distinct shape, so it's easier to make out the unique shape of a word. (When we read, we don't read individual letters in a sentence one at a time l-i-k-e t-h-i-s, rather we see the overall form of a word and recognise it. The little differences in letter shapes help strengthen or dissolve those unique word shapes). You could also offer the square /M as a stylistic alternate.

    It is your design though - so take it or leave it :D 
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